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情节,就是事情的发展过程。在故事里就是人物、人物关系的变化发展过程。简单说,写出的故事要有“开头发展结尾”的过程。,当故事沿着时间顺序向前发展的时候,要注意情节的前后关联,后边说的故事,要和前面讲过的事情有关系。故事的写作顺序通常是从开始到结束,当然可以用倒叙的方式先写结果,然后再写事情的起因。有的时候还会有插叙,但要注意别把插叙成分写得太多而跑题。,4.大胆想象 写故事,尤其是虚构的故事,注意融入想象。写科幻故事、童话故事等,就更需要大胆、合理的想象。,5.要设置悬念 要想故事写得有波澜,使人有阅读的兴趣,还要在情节发展中设置一些悬念、波折和意外等。,书包的故事裤腿书包 我爷爷的书包是个裤腿书包。那时候,爷爷很想上学,可是家里很穷,兄妹多,买不起书包,交不起学费,在爷爷再三央求下,祖奶奶把祖爷爷穿旧了不用的粗布裤子,剪下一条裤腿,缝住一头,另一头缝了根儿布条,就成了爷爷的书包,上面补丁摞补丁,可爷爷却视为珍爱之物!,范文示例,裤腿书包:爷爷的“珍爱之物”,粗布裤子改成,补丁摞补丁。“家里很穷”的缘故。,书本买不起,就自己用线把草纸装订起来,做成手抄本!即使这样,爷爷也只能上到二年级,就辍学了。花布书包 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我的书包嘛!是多功能书包:颜色鲜艳,质量上乘,功能齐备,有装书的地方,有放文具盒的地方,还有放水壶的地方。书包不仅颜色鲜艳、容量超大,而且在设计上还做到了轻巧、舒适。瞧,书包的双肩带和背部都垫上了海绵,背起来减轻了不少压力。再看里面的书有彩图,有插画,个个装订精美,内容丰富。,告诉你们,这样的书包,我可不止一个哦!每年换一个,年年换年年新。是啊,小书包,大见证,我们的生活真是芝麻开花节节高。,多功能书包:颜色鲜艳,质量上乘,功能齐备。每年换一个。,叙议结合,揭示主题,传递情感。,名师总评:这篇文章有以下几点值得借鉴。(1)构思巧妙。文章用三代人所用的书包,讲述三代人不同的生活故事,三代人不同的生活故事又反映了社会的向前发展、人们生活水平的提高这一主题,起到以小见大的作用。,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,(2)妙用小标题。三个小标题打上了不同时代的烙印,“书包”的变迁正反映了时代的变化;三个小标题的运用使文章的结构清晰而严谨。(3)结尾点明主旨。小书包,大见证社会岁岁新,生活节节高。,中考真题,(湖北黄石中考)根据下面材料的提示,按要求作文。生活中,你是否有过这样的经历:遇到沟坎,畏惧不前;明知犯错,不敢正视;心中有疑,害怕问询;面对丑恶,选择沉默其实,只要鼓起勇气,向前再迈一步,就可以突破自我,成为生活的强者。,更多教学资源微信jxzy888666,请以“别怕,向前再迈一步”为题,写一篇作文。要求:(1)文体不限,不得套作,不得抄袭;(2)不少于600字(诗歌不少于30行);(3)文中不得出现含有个人信息的地名,校名,人名等。,这是一道命题作文。本题的关键限制点有三个:一是“别怕”,二是“向前”,三是“再”。从材料看,“别怕”这个词语,是不要怕“沟坎”“犯错”“丑恶”等,这个词语限制了文章情感的基调,这二字可看作是对自己的心理暗示,即一定要克服恐惧心理,战胜自己,当然也可以看作是旁人的一次鼓励。然后要抓住关键词“再”,意即在第一次,【真题解说】,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,失败或者不足留有遗憾的基础上并不甘心,又一次甩开膀子迈开腿。另外一个是“向前”,进行的当然是一次积极的有价值的实践活动,从而挑战并突破了自己。“走”则是写不畏惧的行为,从而挑战并突破了自己。总之,这些关键点充满了满满的正能量。如果写一篇记叙文,我们可以叙述一件或几件成长中的亲身经历,通过叙述生活中的某个人,在她(他)的鼓励、引领下,你走出困境的事。,