应试写作之遣词造句.ppt

杭州新东方学校 罗琼,应试写作之遣词造句,应试写作之遣词造句,中英文表达方式的几个差异应试写作遣词用句常见错误常见表达方式的替换,中英文表达方式的几个差异,Games are more interesting than boring classes,students get addicted with them easily,it is not advisable.Games are more interesting than boring classes,so students get addicted with the former easily,but it is not advisable.,中英文表达方式的几个差异,中文“悟”性强，英文靠关联枯藤老树昏鸦，小桥流水人家 Withered cane,old branches,crow at dusk;bridge,creek,houseBULLSHIT中文意合 英文形合,中英文表达方式的几个差异,Games are more interesting than boring classes,students get addicted with them easily,it is not advisable.It is not advisable for students to get addicted with games despite their attraction,which is greater than that of boring classes.中文：长江流水 后浪推前浪英文：参天大树 枝繁叶茂,中英文表达方式的几个差异,If you do not pay attention to environmental problems,you must suffer huge loss sooner or later.If we do not pay attention to environmental problems,we must suffer huge loss sooner or later.,中英文表达方式的几个差异,If environmental problems are not given enough attention,huge loss is inevitable.中文弱主语 英文需主语第三人称(one)第一第二人称事物人称(无灵主语)被动主动Viewers Discretion Is Advised.,中英文表达方式的几个差异,College students grasping a foreign language and putting it into practice with foreigners is a must.It is a must for college students to grasp a foreign language and put it into practice with foreigners.中文重头 英文重尾,中英文表达方式的几个差异,We must take active solutions to control environmental pollution.Active solutions should be taken to control environmental pollution.中文主观武断 英文客观委婉Should/would/could/may/might,中英文表达方式的几个差异,政府应该对毒品严加监管，严厉打击毒品，严惩毒品犯罪。The government should have tight supervision on drug,fight against drug rigidly,and impose severe penalty on the crimes of drug.中文求同 英文求异,应试写作遣词用句常见错误,主谓不一致/数的错误词性理解错误单词使用错误句式结构问题平行结构错误,主谓不一致/数的错误,One can do shopping online whenever they like because online shops open 24 hours a day.All one needs is a computer which is accessible to the internet.They can buy whatever they want from tonights dinner even to a new car.One can do shopping online whenever they like because online shops open 24 hours a day.All one needs is a computer which is accessible to the internet.They can buy whatever they want from tonights dinner even to a new car.,主谓不一致/数的错误,Everyone should have their own judgment and decision.Everyone should have his/her own judgment and decision.All should have their own judgment and decision.,主谓不一致/数的错误,It is reported that drug abuse prevails among the juvenile,which attract great public concern.It is reported that drug abuse prevails among the juvenile,which attracts great public concern.,主谓不一致/数的错误,The number of students who study for interests increase.The number of students who study for interests increases.,词性理解错误,Like every story has two sides,the technology also brings inevitable harms to our life.As every story has two sides,the technology also brings inevitable harms to our life.Like the two sides in every story,the technology also brings inevitable harms to our life.,词性理解错误,As the globalization of world economy With the globalization of world economy As world economy globalizes,词性理解错误,Many teenagers are unwilling to stop smoking despite they know it is physically detrimental.Many teenagers are unwilling to stop smoking though they know it is physically detrimental.Many teenagers are unwilling to stop smoking despite/despite of/in spite of the fact that they know it is physically detrimental.,词性理解错误,Environmental pollution can lead to damage a countrys economy.Environmental pollution can lead to damaging a countrys economy.Environmental pollution can lead to the damage of a countrys economy.Environmental pollution can lead to a countrys economic crisis.,词性理解错误,Fast food is preferred as its convenience.Fast food is preferred as/because/since/for it is convenient.Fast food is preferred because of/due to/owing to/thanks to/for its convenience.,词性理解错误,Fast food is convenient,therefore it is preferred by some.Fast food is convenient,so it is preferred by some.Fast food is convenient,and therefore/thus/hence/thereby/consequently it is preferred by some.Fast food is convenient;therefore it is preferred by some.,词性理解错误,The problems will last for days,months,even years.The problems will last for days,months,and even years.,词性理解错误,New ways should be adopted to instead the original ones.New ways should be adopted to replace the original ones.,词性理解错误,In nowadays society/in nowadays In current/present/nowaday society/nowadays,词性理解错误,Old employees lack of creativity.Old employees lack creativity.Old employees are lack of creativity.,词性理解错误,Internet has some disadvantages,such as,physically detrimental,negative impact on the youth and personal information disclosure.Internet has some disadvantages,such as being physically detrimental,negative impact on the youth and personal information disclosure.Internet has some disadvantages,such as physical detriment,negative impact on the youth and personal information disclosure.,词性理解错误,Some against this proposal.Some are against this proposal.Some oppose this proposal.Some object to this proposal.,词性理解错误,It is easy for people who overweight to get heart attack.It is easy for people who are overweight to get heart attack.It is easy for the overweight to get heart attack.,单词使用错误,Please give me a reply if you are convenient.Please give me a reply if it is convenient for you.Please give me a reply if you are free.,单词使用错误,The young are easy to be addicted with and indulged in on-line games.It is easy to be addicted with and indulged in on-line games for the young.The young can be addicted with and indulged in on-line games easily.,单词使用错误,The president should be satisfactory with the results.The president should be satisfied with the results.The results are satisfactory/satisfying for the president.,单词使用错误,It is a tough job to handle the question of youth drug abuse.It is a tough job to handle the problem of youth drug abuse.,单词使用错误,Many problems would rise if any information on Internet is accessible.Many problems would arise if any information on Internet is accessible.,句式结构问题,There are many children think that the main aim of their education should be to develop themselves.There are many children thinking that the main aim of their education should be to develop themselves.There are many children who think that the main aim of their education should be to develop themselves.Many children think that the main aim of their education should be to develop themselves.,句式结构问题,Young men like NBA games have a few reasons.Young men who like NBA games have a few reasons.Young men like NBA games with/for a few reasons.,句式结构问题,Via tele-education,the schedule is much more flexible,and relieves traffic pressure.Via tele-education,the schedule is much more flexible,and traffic pressure can be relieved.,句式结构问题,The country,which economy increases quickly,attracts attention worldwide.The country,whose economy increases quickly,attracts attention worldwide.The country,of which economy increases quickly,attracts attention worldwide.,句式结构问题,First of all,foreign countries,which create a wonderful language atmosphere for students.First of all,foreign countries create a wonderful language atmosphere for students.,平行结构错误,The output of 2007 is more than 2006.The output of 2007 is more than 2006s.The output of 2007 is more than the output of 2006.The output of 2007 is more than that of 2006.,平行结构错误,The advantages of A outweigh B.The advantages of A outweigh that of B.The advantages of A outweigh those of B.,平行结构错误,Excessive stress leads to insomnia at night,and vigorless in the daytime.Excessive stress leads to insomnia at night,and being vigorless in the daytime.Excessive stress leads to insomnia at night,and fatigue in the daytime.,常见表达方式的替换,Think/good/bad/advantage/disadvantage/good thing/bad thing/much/people/thing/for example,Think,Claim/suggest/believe/advocate/maintain/suppose/hold the view that,Good/bad,Good beneficial/profitable/helpful/sound/decent/positiveBad harmful/detrimental/hazardous/negative,Advantage/disadvantage,Advantage merit/virtue/benefit/profit/pro/strengthDisadvantage demerit/drawback/flaw/shortcoming/con/cost/weakness,Good thing/bad thing,Good thing blessing/angel/triumphBad thing curse/evil/nightmare,Much,Vast/considerable/large numbers of/plentiful/substantive/a mass of/abundant,People,Some people hold that eggs are delicious;other people deny the obvious fact.However,all people have to eat eggs,because no people has other suggestions.Some hold that eggs are delicious;others deny the obvious fact.However,all have to eat eggs,because none has other suggestions.,People/thing,The general publicHuman beingsSocial membersIndividualsCitizens/residents/city dwellers Specific words:viewers/readers/users/students/tourists/travelers/visitors Specific words:task/job,For example/for instance,One typical example is A,which A serves as a perfect instance A best illustrates the statement.,