用心积累强化训练巧妇有米可炊.ppt

用心积累 强化训练 巧妇有米可炊,2015年温州市“一模”短文改错和书面表达分析与复习对策 温州市第十五中学 郑颖颖,一、我校学生一模整体情况(共361人)二类学校,理科,文科,二、一模短文改错题分析,1、背景材料：一个名为Jim的中学生写了一封信。信中他说道自己非常乐意当一名志愿者去帮助老人院的老人和生病住院的孩子。,2、考查角度：,考查全面，设题巧妙。错误类型涉及词法、句法、行文逻辑等方面。,3、得分情况：平均分(5.60分),4、总体评价与分析,相对于笔试部分的其它题型，改错还算比较简单，但是我们学生的得分却不够理想。从抽样的30份学生答卷中，我们发现错误较多的是4.performance改为performances;5.are改为is;以及最后一个句子10.by the mail改为by mail。这说明大部分学生还未熟练掌握以下知识点：“performance”表演为可数名词；“giving some performance with my friends”动名词做主语，其谓语动词用单数；用什么工具或方式，直接用by sth,中间不用加定冠词“the”.,同时我们也从学生的改错中发现了一些漏洞，如：1.I love children but Ill devote myself to taking good care of him.take 2.please get in touch with me by phone or by mail.touching 去掉with3.I am willing be a volunteer to help others.other4.I would like to help those people whom need help.needs 这些错误的改法都反映了我们的学生英语基础知识比较薄弱，词性辨析、词组记忆、短语积累等方面还要进一步加强。,三、改错复习对策,（1）、考点分类指导，即从考查角度分类指导学生。如动词错误主要涉及主谓一致、动词时态及语态，非谓语动词的形式以及动词的误用等。（2）、每天一篇高考改错练习或10个句子的改错训练或10个错误的段落改错。改错句子和改错段落由模块一到模块五的课本句子和段落改编而来。,例如：M1 Unit4 Earthquake,1.Before the earthquake farmers noticed there were deep cracks on some of the well walls.2.Mice ran out of the fields looked for some places to hide.3.People could hear the sound of planes outside city of Tangshan even when there were no planes in the sky.4.Two-third of the people in Tangshan died or were injured during the earthquake.5.75%of its factories,buildings and 90%of its homes was gone.,M2U2 Olympic Games,1.He used to writing about the Olympic Games more than 2,000 years ago.2.Every fourth years,the Olympic Games are held in the world.3.We have known that the next Olympic Games are to held in this city.4.Its still all about be able to run faster,jump higher and throw further.5.After Tom joined in the baseball club,he took part in many competitions.,M3 Unit 4 Astronomy:the science of the stars,After the“Big Bang”,the earth was just a cloud of dust.It exploded loudly with fire and rock,that were in time to produce the water vapor,carbon dioxide and other gas.Then small plants grew.They multiplied and filled the oceans and seas of oxygen.Many millions of years late,the first green plants began to appear on the land.When the plants grew into forests,reptiles appeared for the first time.They give birth to young generally by lying eggs.When dinosaurs disappeared,mammals became more importantly.Now small clever animals with hands and feet appeared all over the world.As time going by they covered the earth and they are putting too much carbon dioxide into the atmosphere which prevents heat escape from the earth into space.Whether life will continue on earth for millions of years to come will depend on whether this problem will solved.,M4Unit5 Theme Parks,Opened in 1987,Futuroscope is one of the largest space-age park in the world.This theme park in France uses the most advancing technology.Its 3-D cinemas and giant movie screens provide brand new experiences of earth and beyond.Visitors can get closely to parts of the world they had never experienced,go to the bottom of the ocean,flying through the jungle and visiting the edges of the solar system.The amazed,up-to-date information together with many opportunities for hands-on learning make the world come to life in a complete new way for the visitors.,（3）、学做盯师。平时训练一定要求学生对10个地方加以修正。从学生的答卷我们发现一部分学生往往因为畏难情绪，只改几处，从而放弃了多改几处或许还可多得几分的机会。（4）、循环使用之前做过的改错材料，使之成为早读或晚读的资料。这样既强化了学生对词组、语法知识的印象，同时又培养了语感。并且改错也是写作语言、内容、话题等方面很好的积累，值得学生去背诵。,（5）、学生用书后面的不规则动词表抓落实，各各检测，逐步突破。（6）、鼓励学生建立专属于自己的改错集错本，对考点和知识点进行经常性归纳，查漏补缺，建构改错知识网络。,四、书面表达题分析,1、一模试题回顾：为了营造一种“多读书，读好书”的良好氛围，我班将举行一次主题班会，要求以“A good book can affect our life”为题作演讲，向同学们介绍一本自己读过的好书，并谈谈自己的感悟。注意：1.字数：120个词左右；2.讲稿的开头和结尾已给出（不计词数）。Boys and girls,_ Thats all.Thank you!,2、一模作文特点：,文体：应用文之演讲稿题示方式：文字话题：贴近考生实际，考生有话可说。体裁：属于开放性作文，学生可围绕话题 及题目要求，抒发自己的感受。,3、我校学生的得分情况:平均分（14.67）,第四档具体情况：,从统计数据可以看出：我们的学生在书面表达方面太过薄弱，极需提高。,4、学生作文中的具体问题,(1)、词性误用So never give up,and have a big confident.In the end,we will be success.Forgive is better than sadness.In the book,Jane is a brave,kind and ability girl.,(2)、词的用法失误,But which book we should to read?because the book is worthy to read.Reading good books has good effect to our life.,(3)、不规则动词变化的错误,It teached me we should take a positive attitude towards life which can help us face difficulties and challenges bravely.Today I want to share a book named Watched which was wrote by a reporter and I like this book.How lucky we was borned in the city instead of countryside.It told that a lady who have a good family but she falled in love with a handsome person.,(4)、句子成分缺失,The book told a story（）happened in Dong Han Dynasty.I learn from the old man a saying()goes“You can kill me,but nobody can beat me.”As far as I()concerned,there is a book called Lun Yu()affect me a lot.,(5)、中式英语,Maybe they not have a enough good book to spend time reading.It tells me our moms are much love us.Today,I take my best friend come here.And this books some stories are very interesting.,（6）、单词拼写错误不少,Today I have a speach for this class.I also belive the books you read can shape your personality and help you a lot.Though other competing army is stronge,Edward and Bella fight against them in order to save their daughter.,(7)、句子拖沓,Im glad to be here today and its my great honor to deliver a speech here.Today Im going to talk about“A good book can affect our life”.,(8)逻辑上失误,Believe me,reading more books can open your eyes,can give you some surprise,though it can make you happy.,五、书面表达复习对策,（1）、用心积累a.明确评分细则书面表达的考纲要求：考查考生有效运用语言知识清楚连贯地表达意思。,高考英语书面表达评分标准一、评分原则1、本题总分为30分，按5个档次给分。2、评分时，应根据文章的内容和语言初步确定其所属档次，然后以该档次的要求衡量，确定或调整档次，最后给分。3、词数少于110和多于130的，从总分中减去2分。4、评分时，应注意的主要内容：内容要点、应用词汇和语法结构的数量和准确性、上下文连贯性及语言的得体性。5、拼写与标点符号是语言准确性的一个方面，评分时，应视其对交际的影响程度予以考虑。英、美拼写及词汇用法均可接受。6、如书写较差，以至影响交际，将分数降低一个档次。第五档次（很好）：（25-30分）完全完成了试题规定的任务。-覆盖所有内容要点。-应用较多的语法结构和词汇。-语法结构或词汇方面有些许错误，但为尽力使用较复杂结构或较高级词汇所致；具备较强的语言运用能力。-有效地使用了语句间的连接成分，使全文结构紧凑。完全达到了预期的写作目的。第四档（好）（19-24分）完全完成了试题规定的任务。-虽漏掉1、2个次重点，但覆盖所有主要内容。-应用的语法结构和词汇能满足任务的要求。-语法结构或词汇方面应用基本准确，些许错误主要是因尝试复杂语法结构或词汇所致。-应用简单的语句间的连接成分，使全文结构紧凑。达到了预期的写作目的。,第三档（适当）：（13-18）基本完成了试题规定的任务。-虽漏掉一些内容，但覆盖所有主要内容。-应用的语法结构和词汇能满足任务的要求。-有一些语法结构或词汇方面的错误，但不影响理解。-应用简单的语句间的连接成分，使全文内容连贯。整体而言，基本达到了预期的写作目的。第二档（较差）：（712分）未恰当完成试题规定的任务。-漏掉或未描述清楚一些主要内容，写了一些无关内容。-语法结构单调，词汇知识有限。-有一些语法结构或词汇方面的错误，影响了对写作内容的理解。-较少使用语句间的连接成分，内容缺少连贯性。信息未能清楚地传达给读者。第一档（差）：（1-6分）未完成试题规定的任务。-明显遗漏主要内容，写一些无关内容，原因可能是未理解试题要求。-语法结构单调、词汇项目有限。-较多语法结构或词汇方面的错误，影响对写作内容的理解。-缺乏语句间的连接成分，内容不连贯。信息未能传达给读者。0分未能传达给读者任何信息；内容太少、无法评判；写的内容均与所要求内容无关或所写内容无法看清。,通过了解评分标准，使学生知道书面表达的努力方向：1、字迹卷面清楚2、结构清楚3、语言正确 4、思维严密,b、学会欣赏范文、满分作文、五档作文 找出满分缘由：结构布局、亮点词汇、亮点句式、合理的拓展等。,假如你是李越，是高三学生，学习任务繁重。体育课已经成为你们难得的放松时间，可目前你校体育课内容单一，有时甚至被占用。请你用英语写一篇短文，给校报投稿，谈谈你对此现象的看法，并提出一些合理的建议。注意：1.词数100-120词 2.文中需包含提示内容，可适当增加细节，以使行文连贯。Dear Editor,As the college entrance examination is drawing near,we senior three students are occupied with busy work._,【亮点说明】,所给范文的一大亮点是句式多变：In a way,PE class is our only chance to relax and enjoy ourselves at school.这句话用了不定式做目的状语。However,it is a pity that our present PE class is quite dull and sometimes even replaced by other subjects.这句话用了it做形式主语。The can not only build up our body but also shape our personality.Not only can PE class build our body but also can shape our personality.这句话用了倒装句。,Therefore,it will be great loss to us students if it is replaced by other lessons.Therefore,personally I hold the view that it would be great loss to us students if it were replaced by other lessons.这句话用了同位语从句。Meanwhile,I think the teacher can design and organize some fun sports besides dull field and track practice or ball games,where everyone can be involved and have fun as well.Meanwhile,I suggest the teachers should design and organize varieties of fun sports besides dull field and track practice or ball games,where everyone can be involved and have fun as well.这句话用了非限制性定语从句。,近几年浙江高考大都为（半）开放作文。写好此类作文的关键就是审好题，审题时应做到：,c、学审题谋篇，列表格式中文提纲,同时要注意（半）开放作文有时虽然有简要的提纲，但只是对文章的提示和概括，并不是主题句，我们在谋篇时要提炼出文章的主题句和各段落的主题句，然后围绕主题句进行扩展。,d、提供各种文体的模板，要求学生背诵，默写和运用。e、扩大知识面，开阔视野，积累情感体验。途径可以是阅读群书，或积累完形、阅读材料、改错的素材，为书面表达服务。,我们的学生基础存在很大的差异性，所以要设立不同的目标，逐步向更高目标迈进。,2、强化训练 a.步步登高,b、用平常心对待,在平时的备考过程中我们将按不同的类型分别进行训练，强化文体写作。（1）提示方式：提纲作文、图画作文、图表作文。（2）体裁：,(3)话题写作：人际关系、学习生活、社会公德、健康环保等。,c、强化思维拓展训练,给出中文的一个点，让学生自己去发散思维，想出不同层次的点。人们为什么去做兼职挣零花钱/了解社会/体验生活经济上少依赖父母/为今后找工作提供经验/感受各行各业的辛苦/感恩的心 参加街舞社的好处交到志同道合的朋友/训练自己的毅力/看起来更酷/丰富了业余生活/变得更自信 网络谣言的危害（1 造成社会恐慌从而影 响人们的日常生活（2 破坏网站的可靠性从而在未来人们不再相信此网站(3 给当事人造成麻烦_从而不敢 出现在公共场 所呼吁倡导人们不要以讹传讹，要有公德心,d、认真批改、注重讲评,只有通过批改作文，老师才能发现学生的薄弱之处，明确学生的问题和我们自己上课努力的方向，从而适时地加以技巧点拨。,e、鼓励学生不厌其烦地修改自己的作文,努力做到“第一次写 _第一次批改_ 第一次讲评_ 第二次写/仿写_ 第二次批改_ 第二次讲评_第三次再写”,Thank You!,