《中指作文陈霞》PPT课件.ppt

中考指导用书作文突破全攻略,秣陵初级中学 陈霞,Warm-up,monitor out-going tall honest easy-going ready,中考作文分值变化,2006年 10分,2007年 15分,How can we write a good composition(作文)?,Standards of Grading2006年南京市中考书面表达评分标准,第五档:(9-10分)能写明全部要点，语言基本无误或有 少量拼写错误，行文流畅，表达清楚。第四档:(7-8分)能写明大部分要点，语言有一些错误(句子结构或动词时态错误1-2处)，但行文基 本流畅，表达基本清楚。第三档:(5-6分)写明一些要点，语言错误较多(句子结 构或动词时态错误3-4处)，但意思基本连贯,表达基本清楚。第二档:(3-4分)能写出少数要点，语言错误多，意思 不连贯，影响意思表达。第一档:(0-2分)只能写出若干单词，无可读句子。,中考作文对考生要求(requirements)：1、内容要完整（写明要点）2、没有语法错误3、语句流畅4、书写规范,写作文步骤:第一步就是要认真审题，弄清楚要写什么，用笔勾画出要点并适当分析这些要点。第二步就是要列出写作提纲（outline）。第三步就是按照写作提纲和写作要点按步骤写出每一部分的具体内容。第四步就是把文章各部分连接成文。,第五步就是检查文章是否有语言错误。,注意点：1、整体结构*(审题)2、列出提纲3、要点全面4、语言准确性(语法错误/经典语句 或短语)5、行文流畅(过渡语言)6、书写规范,假如你是Sam,你的学校正在举行“志愿者日”(Volunteer Day)的活动，你想组织一个志愿者小队，请你写一封信给你的班主任吴老师，谈谈你的想法要求结构清晰、语言通顺，字数不少于80词。你可以从以下几个方面来考虑：1.What do you want to do and who do you want to offer help to?2.Why do you want to offer help?3.What can you do?,（P107）,Dear Mr.Wu,要点一要点二要点三你的想法Your sincerelySam,提纲,What do you want to do or who do you want to offer help to?Volunteer Day is coming in our school.My friends and I want to do something meaningful to help poor children in the west.Why do you want to offer help?We live a happy life but some children in the west of our country dont.Some families there are so poor that they do not have enough money for their children to go to school or go to hospital when they are sick.What can you do?We hope to raise some money to help them.We can also bring our old books,clothes or toys to sell that day.And all the money we get will be sent to the poor children.,Dear Mr.Wu,Volunteer Day is coming in our school.My friends and I want to do something meaningful to help poor children in the west.We live a happy life but some children in the west of our country dont.Some families there are so poor that they do not have enough money for their children to go to school or go to hospital when they are sick.We hope to raise some money to help them.We can also bring our old books,clothes or toys to sell that day.And all the money we get will be sent to the poor children.We will be happy for helping people in need.(想法)Your sincerelySam,My school,P73,My school,Our school is large and beautiful.We love our school very much.We get up at six every morning,and then we do morning exercises.We have breakfast at seven.After that we have four lessons in the morning.We have lunch at twelve.We start lessons at two oclock in the afternoon.They are over at half past four.After school,we often do some sports on the playground.We all study hard.Our school life is very interesting.I like it very much.,P73,作文中应避免的几种常见语言错误：时态错误。（扣分多，一个时态错误扣分在12分左右。）中国式的英语。（不正确的英文表达会让整句不得分。）单词拼写错误。（单词拼写一定要过关。）介词,代词，非谓语动词或形容词副词的不正确使用。（对单词的词性要熟悉。）名词单复数。（细心就可以避免的错。）,I am writting to 推荐 Wu Dong win this years Excellent Youth League Member Awards.Wu Dong is in Class Four,Grade Three.He is working hardly.His subjects are good.He is like sports.Hes drawing is very good.He often help other student.,I am writing to recommend Wto win this years Excellent Youth League Member Awards.Wu Dong is in Class Four,Grade Three.He works hard.He does well in all the subjects.likes sportHis drawing is very good.He often helps other students.,I am writting to 推荐 Wu Dong win this years Excellent Youth League Member Awards.Wu Dong is in Class Four,Grade Three.He is working hardly.His subjects are good.He is like sports.Hes drawing is very good.He often help other student.,One day,Amy fell sad because she isnt get good marks in the exam.Wu Dong come to her and listened her problem.And gave she some advices.He is good and we very like he.I hope to hear a letter from you soon.,One day,Amy fell sad because she isnt get good marks in the exam.Wu Dong come to her and listened her problem.And gave she some advices.He is good and we very like he.I hope to hear a letter from you soon.,One day,Amy felt sad because shedidnt get good marks in the exam.Wu Dong came to and listened to problems.Then he her some advice.He is good and we like him very much.I hohear from you soon.,Smooth writing行文流畅,Use transitional expressions(用过渡语),Transitional expressions(过渡表达)：(1)表示先后次序的过渡词first of all 首先first,second,third;firstly,secondly,thirdly；first,next;afterwards;finally(at last,in the end)(2)表示因果关系的过渡词as,since,for,because,because of,as a result,so,so that(3)表示转折、比较、对比的过渡词 but,however，while be different from on one hand,on the other hand,(4)表示举例的过渡词for example such as,like(5)表示递进的过渡词 as well,also;too,either,whats more(而且)not only but also(6)表示总结的过渡词in a word(总之),above all(最重要),I think life on Mars is much better than that on Earth,especially with my robot Tim._(首先),I can have Tim do all the housework,_(如),doing the laundry,cleaning dishes,making the bed,etc._(结果),I will have more free time._(第二点),Tim can help me a lot with my study._(当)I study at home,I can have Tim take notes for me.It can_(也)help me with my homework._(还有),it will correct the mistakes in my homework._(然而),if it catches a virus,it causes trouble._(为了)make it work normally,I have to check it once a week.,Firstly,such as,As a result,Secondly,When,also,Whats more,However,In order to,中考作文对考生要求(requirements)：1、内容要完整（写明要点）2、没有语法错误3、语句流畅4、书写规范,练兵场,P158七书面表达,A)假如你叫Lucy,你的好朋友Millie在生活中受到以下几个问题的困扰,她写信告诉了你,你能帮她找出其中的原因么?1.I feel lonely at home from time to time._2.I also feel lonely at school from time to time._3.I often quarrel with my classmates._4.I always feel stressed before exams._5.I can not divide my time between my study and hobbies._,Maybe you didnt find something interesting to do or your parents are too busy to stay with you.Perhaps you didnt make friends with your classmates or get on well with them.Probably you are not polite or friendly to them.Its possible that you are not confident enough.You didnt plan time well and couldnt focus on the things you were doing.,B)请根据你的分析,给Millie写一封信，帮她早日解决这些问题。（信的开头和结尾已给出）Dear Millie.Thank you very much for your letter._I hope these suggestions are useful to you.Best wishes!Yours,Lucy,Dear Millie,Thank you very much for your letter.Im sorry to hear that you are worried and I hope I can help you.It seems that you didnt get on well with you classmates.I have two pieces of advice for you.First,youd better not be too stubborn and try to be polite to others.Second,being helpful is an easy way to make more friends.You can listen to their problms and try to help out of trouble.,You also said you have problems with your study.Perhaps you are not confident enough.It can enrich your knowledge,if you read more books and try your best to study hard.Then you will feel more confident to get on well with your study.At the same time,youd better plan your time well.As a result you can have more time for your hobbies.You are lonely at home,dont you?I think you ought to talk with your family members about your problems.Share happiness and sadness with them.I hope these suggestions are useful to you.Best wishes!Yours Lucy,点评：1、整体结构2、要点3、语言准确性(语法错误/经典语句或短语)4、行文流畅(过渡语言)5、书写规范得分_(总分15分),Homework,Check your composition and correct the mistakes.,Thank youBye-bye!,