大学英语四级作文讲座.ppt

大学英语四级作文讲座,单位：外语教研室教员：胡 继 岳,大学英语四级作文评分标准,2分：条理不清，思路紊乱，语言支离破 碎或大部分句子均有错误，且多为 严重错误。5分：基本切题。表达思想不清楚，连贯 性差。有较多的严重的语言错误。8分:基本切题。有些地方表达思想不够 清楚，文字勉强连贯；语言错误相多，其中有一些是严重错误。,大学英语四级作文评分标准,11分：切题。表达思想清楚，文字连贯 但有少量语言错误。14分：切题。表达思想清楚，文字通顺，连贯性较好。基本上无语言错误，仅有个别小错。,1.somebody think that“Lucky Numbers”will bring them good luck.In China,if your telephone number is“888888”,you will feel very happy and think that you will be rich.But some body think that number is nothing about luck.They have many“lucky numbers”,but they dont luck at all.I think number is nothing about luck too.People hope“Lucky Numbers”bring good luck.But that is only willing,like mothers hope their children being good forever.We can get hope from“Lucky Numbers”and make our life more colorful.But we will never depand on it.We must depand on our ability,not some numbers.Perhaps we will feel etter for“Lucky Numbers”and conect them with some lucky things.But its only our feelings.“Lucky Numbers”will bring nothing but hopes.,2.In some people opinion,the mumber really bring good luck.because their belive that something since numbers bring good luck.The numbers to be used people very important in scoity.On the other hand,they dont believe that lucking number can bring somebody good luck.beacuse numbers is numbers,it is without“Good Luck”.I dont belive that lucking mumbers can bring me good luck.I think at arleary by have chance.Human being shoule have a kind of a heast.that it is uprosould.In a wony.I wish Good Luck with me,but dont belive Lucking mumber bring me anything.,3.Some people think that some numbers will bring them good luck.Eight is always regarded as a lucky number just because it sounds like having much money.Some young people also choose a date in which there is 8to hold their wedding.They think it will bring them wealth.But some people think that number is nothing to do with luck.They say,“Number is just a number.Success or failure is more decided by ones effort”.They dont think six will make thins easy or four will make them unfortunate.I think number is not important.If you think a good number would make you less worry about what you will do,you can choose it.But at the same time you should remember good luck cant fall from the sky just because you choose a good date to begin.It is yourself who really bring good luck and success.,4.Some people think that certain numbers will bring good luck to them.Numbers such as six,eight,sixteen and eighteen are regarded as lucky numbers.There are also people who think that their success is related to certain numbers.However,some other people think numbers have nothing to do with their luck.They believe in their own abilities rather than“lucky numbers”.They dont do things according to certain numbers.I think it is a persons own business whether he believes in a certain number or not.The most important thing is that he has done the work by himself and has done it quite well.As to the belief of numbers,its their personal choice.,5.With the development of economicy,more and more people thought that a“Lucky Numbers”can bring good luck.But I thought other peoples point were right,they said that numbers were not concented with luck.Long long ago,the knowledge is poor,people can not decide one thing depend on scientise.They thought everything has been certain indenficate by god.But today,it is surperised that there were still many people would believe that.Recently,a lot of people believed that the number“8”means“get rich”.the number“4”means“die”.If somebodys phone number has many“4”,they are unhappy.But if its“8”they will very very happy.I thought its a fun.So I thought“Lucky Numbers”dont bring Good Luck.,句子的写作,1.背句子，文章，扩大词汇量。2.尽量使用简单句子。3.注意句子的多样性。4.不要使用太多的代词。5.尽量使用英语中现成的习惯句型和成语，避免写出中文式的英语。,句子的写作,6.注意句子的统一性（句子完整，只有一个中心），连贯性和逻辑性。eg.1.The doctor is about thirty,but has already published some books.1*.The doctor who has already published some books is about thirty.2.When I came home,I saw him driving one the motor way.2*.One my way home,.,段落的写作,1.一个中心句：（主旨句）点出段落的中心思想；位于段落的开头。中心句规定了段落要讨 论的中心内容，具有统帅全段的作用。2.若干个推展句：说明支持中心思想；推展句应 紧扣中心句，展开内容；不应写出与中心句 不相干的句子。-按事物发生，发展或变化的时间顺序写。-根据事物空间和位置安排来写。-按事物或问题的性质，特征来写。3.结尾句：作出结论。归纳，总结一段中心思想。,十句句子文章,段I 句 1 主旨句句 2 观点句 1 句 3 观点句 2 段II 句 4 中心句 句 5 论据（推展）句 1 句 6 论据（推展）句 2 句 7 论据（推展）句 3 段III 句 8 中心句 句 9 推展句句 10 结论句,作文中转承语的使用,1.表时间或次序：(1).firstly(first of all),secondly,finally;(2).on one hand,on the other hand;(3).for one thing,for another,whats more,in a word;2.表空间：close to,in front of,in the center of,next to,opposite to,above,against,behind,below 3.表因果关系：accordingly,as a consequence,as a result,consequently,due to,hence,in this way,so,therefore,thus,作文中转承语的使用,4.表比较或对比：however,in contrast,in spite of,likewise,not onlybut also,on the contrary,similarly,whereas,nevertheless 5.表举例或例证：as an illustration,for example,for instance,incidentally,namely,that is,such as.6.表强调：anyway,furthermore,in addition,in fact in particular,moreover 7.表结论或摘要：as has been noted,in any event,in brief,in conclusion,in short,in summary,therefore,to conclude,to sum up.,作文中的常见错误,1.主谓一致问题：1.One hundred miles were covered in a single night.2.Every man and woman are now aware of the terrible consequences of the habit of smoking.3.The teacher,as well as a number of students,were asked to attend the party.,作文中的常见错误,2.时态问题：(1)时态前后不一致1.Mary tries to persuade me to go to the concert,but as I will be busy,I had refused.(2)一般现在时与一般将来时的误用2.If the weather will be fine tomorrow,well have a picnic.3.Classes wont begin until Monday morning.4.Tomorrow at this time,well know who will be elected.,作文中的常见错误,3.分词独立结构问题：5.Being a fine day,we decided to have a football match.(It being)4.缺少关联词:6.we came to the cinema,it was still dark.5.语态问题 6.标点符号 7.缺少谓语,作文练习,The Prospect of the 21st Century1.21世纪是一个科技发达的时 代。2.然而科技的发展也会给世界 带来一些问题。3.对我们学生来说，21世纪意 味着挑战。,The Prospect of the 21st Century 21st century will be a new age of science and technology.All modern conveniences will drop into our our life.Mans daily life will be managed by computers easily and efficiently.Yet the advanced technology may bring us some problems.It will certainly multiply the power of the war-makers.Besides,many of modern devices people use will increasingly eliminate mans needs for physical contacts.This will further contribute to mans isolation and loneliness.To us students,the 21st century means a challenge.It forces us to study hard to make full preparations to meet the challenge of the new century.,