写作点拨系列(十二).ppt
写作点拨系列（十二）短文写作之(半)开放作文,(2012湖北高考)请根据以下提示，并结合事例，用英语写一篇短文。You cannot choose what you are given,but you can choose how you make use of it.注意：无须写标题，不得照抄英语提示语；除诗歌外，文体不限；文中不得透露个人姓名和学校名称；词数为120个左右。,【审题抓准信息快速推断】,(半)开放性作文,你无法选择命运，却可以尽可能去利用你所拥有的,一般过去时,第一人称,【定点把握要点，遣词造句】第1段：讲述个人的遭遇【信息】通过事例来证明选择权【点拨】转化为第一人称，引出自己熟悉的事例【运用】(1)三年前我在决定命运的一次重要考试中失败，成为一名普通中学的学生。Three years ago _and became _.,I failed an important exam in my life,a student in an ordinary middle school,(2)尽管在这个破旧的校园和设备简陋的教室里我感到失望，但我发现老师们耐心又体贴。一般表达：Though I felt disappointed at the shabby campus and the poorly-equipped classroom,I found the teachers patient and considerate.高级表达：(变倒装语序)_,I found the teachers patient and considerate.,Disappointed as I felt at the shabby campus and the poorly-,equipped classroom,(3)我决定好好利用它。I decided to _.,make the best of it,第2段：如何与命运抗争【信息】起作用的不是环境而是利用或改造环境的能力【点拨】增加细节，以使上下文呼应【运用】(4)无论我什么时候遇到困难，他们总是能帮我。_,they were always available.,Whenever I had difficulties,(5)不久我就成为班里的优秀学生，这极大地激励了我，增加了我的自信。一般表达：Soon,I became one of the top students in my class.It greatly increased my confidence and got me motivated.高级表达：(用非限制性定语从句合并句子)Soon,I became one of the top students in my class,_ _.,which,greatly increased my confidence and got me motivated,第3段：说明把握机会的重要性【信息】通过以上事例，得出结论：只要不放弃，把握机会，坚持下去就会成功【点拨】看法有许多，但要积极向上，对学生起到教育的作用【运用】(6)我的经验告诉我：不是你被给了什么，而是你如何利用决定着你会成为什么样的人。一般表达：My experience tells me that not what you are given but how you make use of it determines who you are.,高级表达：(用强调句式改写上句)My experience tells me that _.,how you make use of it that determines who you are,it is not what you are given but,【注意事项】开放性作文往往会给出一定的素材和主题，让学生在此基础上自由发挥，有较强的灵活性与开放性，难度较大，而半开放性作文给出要点的限制较小，难度相对较小，考生在写作时需要注意：1.在着手写作之前，要认真审题，把握命题要求，找准素材或主题中的关键句；2.依据关键句，草拟提纲，梳理文章脉络，使得文章中心突出；3.准确定位人称、时态。遣词造句要扬长避短。大部分情况下，文中使用动词一般过去时为主，但人称的使用较为灵活，应该依据文章提示准确定位人称。应尽可能运用自己熟悉的单词、短语或句型来灵活表达，避免重复使用。,【成篇衔接过渡，连句成篇】Three years ago I failed an important exam in my life and became a student in an ordinary middle school.Disappointed as I felt at the shabby campus and the poorly-equipped classroom,I found the teachers patient and considerate.Besides,I enjoyed the friendly atmosphere in class.I decided to make the best of it.I worked hard and got along well with my teachers and classmates.,Whenever I had difficulties,they were always available.Soon,I became one of the top students in my class,which greatly increased my confidence and got me motivated.My experience tells me that it is not what you are given but how you make use of it that determines who you are.,
