写作点拨系列(十).ppt
写作点拨系列（十）短文写作之图画作文,(2012陕西高考)假定你是李华。下面的图画描述了教师节那天你们班组织的一次活动，请根据写作要点并参考图画内容，为校刊“英语角”版面写一篇短文。,写作要点：1.活动的策划；2.教室的布置；3.活动的内容；4.你的感想。Ms.Li,our English teacher,did not receive a single greeting card from us students early on Teachers Day.She would have never thought a complete surprise was waiting for her._,【审题抓准信息快速推断】,图画作文,描述教师节的一次活动,一般过去时为主,第一人称为主,【定点把握要点，遣词造句】第1段：点明话题令人吃惊的教师节(已给出)第2段：教师节准备【信息】图画描述了教师节那天你们班组织的一次活动【点拨】转化人称，分析图画，结合提示确定活动内容【运用】(1)随着教师节的来临，作为今年的一次改变,我们班决定举办一场晚会来庆祝这个重要的日子。一般表达：Teachers Day was approaching.Our class decided to hold a party to celebrate the important day for a change this year.,高级表达：(用连词合并句子)_,our class decided to hold a party to celebrate the important day for a change this year.,As Teachers Day was approaching,(2)9月10号的那天下午，我们中的一些同学用纸花和气球来装饰教室，其他同学去买蛋糕、饮料和水果。On the afternoon of September 10，_,and others went to buy cakes,drinks and fruits.(3)黑板上装饰有漂亮的字，上面写着“教师节快乐”。The blackboard was decorated with beautiful words,_.,some of us decorated our,classroom with paper flowers and balloons,which read“Happy Teachers Day!”,第3段：活动的内容【信息】分析图画中的内容：女教师、学生站队、鲜花等【点拨】适度发挥，切合图画内容即可【运用】(4)走进教室，李老师吃惊地发现我们正列队等候，拍着手大声地说“教师节快乐”。_,Ms.Li was surprised to find we were standing in line,_ and saying loudly“Happy Teachers Day!”,Entering the classroom,clapping hands,(5)我们班的班长王华把准备好的花送给了她。Wang Hua,our monitor,_.(6)一些女生为李老师唱起了歌，三位男生表演了功夫。Some of the girls sang songs for Ms.Li,_.,presented her with the prepared,flowers,and three boys showed,their kung fu talent,第4段：你的感想【信息】紧扣教师节，表达对老师的感谢【点拨】感想符合教师节话题内容即可【运用】(7)李老师与我们一起愉快地度过了教师节，但我们知道她的辛勤劳动和对我们的指导我们再怎么表达感谢也不为过。Ms.Li spent a wonderful time with us,_.,but we know that we,cannot thank her enough for all her hard work and guidance,【注意事项】这是一篇图画作文。在写作中要注意：1.图画作文所提供的材料是一幅或几幅图，所写内容有日记、故事、简介等，有的还提供一定的参考词汇，因此有一定的发挥空间，但它并不是允许考生随意发挥，这是图画作文的特点；2.该类作文的写作一般分四步：一审，二列，三连，四改。即看清图画表达的含义，再根据要点逐一翻译，加以串连，最后修改，检查即可。,【成篇衔接过渡，连句成篇】Ms.Li,our English teacher,did not receive a single greeting card from us students early on Teachers Day.She would have never thought a complete surprise was waiting for her.,As Teachers Day was approaching,our class decided to hold a party to celebrate the important day for a change this year.On the afternoon of September 10，some of us decorated our classroom with paper flowers and balloons,and others went to buy cakes,drinks and fruits.The blackboard was decorated with beautiful words,which read“Happy Teachers Day!”,Entering the classroom,Ms.Li was surprised to find we were standing in line,clapping hands and saying loudly“Happy Teachers Day!”Wang Hua,our monitor,presented her with the prepared flowers.Some of the girls sang songs for Ms.Li,and three boys showed their kung fu talent.Before we left,we enjoyed a new English song by Ms.Li.Ms.Li spent a wonderful time with us,but we know that we cannot thank her enough for all her hard work and guidance.,
