写作点拨系列(五).ppt

写作点拨系列（五）短文写作之记叙文,(2012湖南高考)生活中，你自己或他人曾有过物品不慎丢失而又找回的经历，其间有烦恼、有惊喜、有感慨请就此写一篇英语短文。主要内容包括：1)丢失的物品；2)物品失而复得的经过；3)你的感想。注意：1.词数不少于120个；2.不能使用真实姓名和学校名称。,【审题抓准信息快速推断】,记叙文,物品失而复得的经过和感想,一般过去时为主,第一人称,【定点把握要点，遣词造句】第1段：点明话题丢失的物品【信息】生活中，你自己或他人曾有过物品不慎丢失的经历【点拨】转化为第一人称并适当扩充内容【运用】(1)我仍然记得上学期我在学校的那一天。一般表达：I still remember a day last term.I was in our school on that day.高级表达：(用定语从句合并句子)_,I still remember a day last term when I was in our school.,(2)我丢了眼镜，没有它我什么也看不见。一般表达：I lost my glasses.I cant see anything without my glasses.高级表达：(用非限制性定语从句合并句子)_,I lost my glasses,without which I couldnt see anything.,第2段：物品失而复得的经过【信息】物品找回的经历，其间有烦恼、有惊喜【点拨】适当增加细节，以使行文连贯【运用】(3)一个下雨的下午，我来到学校图书馆，希望去消磨时间。One rainy afternoon,I came to the school library,_.(4)我一意识到(丢眼镜)就返回去了，结果发现图书馆关门了。The moment I noticed it,I returned,_.,hoping to,kill time,only to find the library,closed,(5)第二天我返回图书馆时发现眼镜不见了。我感到烦恼。The next day _,I found they were gone._.(6)我的同班同学也帮忙了，并且他们中的一些甚至在背上贴了告示，写着凡是发现和返还眼镜的都会收到一份特别的礼品。My classmates also helped me and some of them even put up notices on their backs _.,when I went back to the library,I was worried,reading that whoever found and returned,the glasses would receive a special gift,(7)一会儿之后，办公室一位老师打电话告诉了我一个好消息。_,a teacher in the office called me and _ _.,A short while later,told,me a piece of good news,第3段：你的感想【信息】有感慨【点拨】对于感想题目中未给出具体的内容，主要考查考生对物品失而复得的体验。【运用】(8)没有人会知道那时我多么高兴。No one could tell _.(9)我体会到，一方面，今后我应该更加细心，另一方面，我们应该乐于助人。I learned that _,I should be careful enough in future,_,we should be ready to help each other and care for each other.,how delighted I was at that time,on the one hand,and on the other hand,【注意事项】1.本文是一篇记叙文。要牢牢把握物品失而复得的过程以及丢失物品、找回物品的心理变化以及感想，用恰当的语言描述出来即可，同时还要注意时间的安排。2.常用表达:(1)描述心理变化的：worried,delighted；(2)描述丢失眼镜的：gone；(3)描述寻找的：found；(4)描述感慨的：be careful enough in future等。,【成篇衔接过渡，连句成篇】I still remember a day last term when I was in our school.I lost my glasses,without which I couldnt see anything.One rainy afternoon,I came to the school library,hoping to kill time.Unfortunately,I left my glasses on the desk.The moment I noticed it,I returned,only to find the library closed.The next day when I went back to the library,I found they were gone.I was worried.My head teacher told me to put up notices outside the lost and found office.My classmates also,helped me and some of them even put up notices on their backs reading that whoever found and returned the glasses would receive a special gift.A short while later,a teacher in the office called me and told me a piece of good news.I eventually found my“two windows”.No one could tell how delighted I was at that time.From the experience,I learned that on the one hand,I should be careful enough in future,and on the other hand,we should be ready to help each other and care for each other.,