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托福作文写作范文详解题目：Somepeoplebelievethatunpaidcommunityserviceshouldbeacompulsorypartofhighschoolprogrammes(forexampleworkingforacharityzimprovingtheneighbourhoodorteachingsportstoyoungerchildren).Towhatextentdoyouagreeordisagree?话题和题型分类教育类，同意不同意型题目分析一些人认为义务的社区服务应该是高中课程中的必修课，对此你怎么认为？是否同意？思路提示同意义务的社区服务成为必修课，有助于增强每个学生的社会责任感每个人都是社区的一员，从社区获得帮助的同时，应该做出贡献进行回馈学习不应该只是死啃书本，否则容易与社会脱节，义务社区服务帮助增强学生在社会中与人交流的能力，了解社会不同意高中生学业压力繁重，义务社区服务占用时间和精力不是每个学校和社区都有条件为学生提供进行社区服务的平台SampleAnswerAsavitalcomponentofhighschooleducation,communityserviceshouldalwaysbeapartofthewholeeducationalsystem.Personally,Icouldnotagreemorebecausenotonlystudentsbutalsothewholesocietycanbenefitalotfromunpaidservice.（首段开篇摆明观点:高中教育应该包含社区服务）Admittedly,unpaidjobsforcharityorganizationstakeupsomeofthetimestudentsneedtospendmorevaluabletimeontheirstudies.Namelyzinashortterm,thisactivitycannotbringanyrewardforthestudyofthoseparticipants.However,peopleshouldneverjudgeactivitieswithashort-sightedview;instead,long-termperspectivebecomesmorereasonableandsmarter.Withsufficientsocialexperiencesandworkingskills,studentsmaybecomemorecompetitiveinthejobmarketaftergraduation.（从反面让步，后从正面分析，论述更客观辩证）Obviouslyzestablishingcommunityserviceasamandatorypartofhighschooleducationisnotonlyhelpfulforstudentsbutalsomeaningfulforthewholesociety.Firstly,bothtext-basedandsociety-basedmethodsmakeupthewholestructureofthehighschooleducation.Communityserviceperfectlycombinesbothpartsinordertoaccomplishabetteroutcomeforthosestudentsbecausetheyhavetheopportunitytoputtheirnewlylearnttheories,suchastheoriesofsocialwork,intopractice.Secondly,throughoutthesecharitableactivities,studentscanworkwithdisabledpeople,sotheyarelikelytopaymoreattentiontothesespecialgroupsandunderstandthembetterintheirdailylife.Moreimportantly,itwillshapetheirstrongandindependentpersonalitiesgradually.Namelyzofferinghelptoothersteachestheyoungtounderstandandsupporteachotherinthecommunity.（从正面详细论述作者观点：学生可以把理论用于实践；学生能更对特殊群体有更多的关注；能帮助学生形成坚强、独立的品格）Insumzitisamusttoaddcommunityservicetothecompulsoryeducation,especiallyinhighschools.Throughsuchservice,studentscangainbothsocialexperiencesandworkingskillsthatwillcontributetotheircompetence.Inaddition,itisalsomeaningfulforthewholesocietybecausestudentsknowmoreaboutandunderstandthesocietybetter.（全文总结，再次重申观点）满分要素剖析：语言表达本文论述先从反面切入，而后从正面详细分析，使得论述更客观辩证。语言表达流畅，一系列连接词如personally,admittedly,however,instead,moreimportantly使得行文更加连贯。Admittedly,unpaidjobsforcharityorganizationstakeupsomeofthetimestudentsneedtospendmorevaluabletimeontheirstudies.Namely,inashorttermzthisactivitycannotbringanyrewardforthestudyofthoseparticipants.Admittedly可用于论述时表明让步，namely可用于解释论据。Insumzitisamusttoaddcommunityservicetothecompulsoryeducation,especiallyinhighschools.句型InSUm用于议论文结尾总结观点。逻辑结构本文是总分总的结构。作者开篇先陈述事实并表达自己的观点，第二段先从反面切入，而后从正面分析，第三段进一步正面论述作者观点，使得论证更加客观辩证。最后一段作者总结前文论述，重申观点。