新题型读后续写 第19篇ppt课件.pptx

,读后续写,1.原文一致原则内容要前后衔接，上下连贯语言表达风格一致。2.正能量原则故事内容一定要正能量，弘扬社会主义核心价值观。如迷路了但最终一定回到了家；失败了或遇到困难了，但最终一定成功了；吵架了但最后一定是言归于好，和睦相处；犯错了，最后一定会改过自新，重新做人；贼逃了，最后一定是绳之以法，等等。3.曲折性原则凡是故事都应有跌宕起伏，其中人物会遇到困难或问题，但最终能解决。,写作指导,三大原则,四个步骤,1,3,4,2,阅读下面材料，根据其内容和所给段落开头语续写两段，使之构成一篇完整的短文。续写的词数应为150左右。,读后续写,The Make-up Guy Dave was a make-up(化妆)artist who regularly held makeup artistry classes at the local community college.He was well known as an excellent trainer and enjoyed great popularity.Usually,the majority of his students were middle-aged housewives,who wanted to fine-tune their make-up skills so as to make themselves more attractive.But this time,it was beyond him that his class was attended by a man as well.,The new student was a gentleman in his best years with a seemingly boundless interest in make-up artistry.He was keen to learn as much as he possibly could and asked questions whenever and wherever possible.He was so absorbed in learning that he wouldnt stop until he was satisfied with the result of his work.Understandably,the man was the number one subject of conversation when the other women were alone.,Speculations(猜测)quickly started to spread.Why did he learn make-up?Was he to seek for a woman to be his life partner?How about my neighbors youngest daughter?Why on earth would he attend such a woman class?Who could it be?Doubts like this came crowding in.The community college was placed in a remote rural area,which was why the other participants were quite doubtful of the mans intentions.,Throughout the lessons,ignoring the curious women around him,the man carefully listened and wrote everything down he learned,leaving the women more and more curious and puzzled.When the day and class were slowly coming to an end,the gossiping women simply could not hide their curiosity any longer,for they knew it was time to remove their doubts,otherwise?,Finally,one of them couldnt resist her curiosity,so she picked up the courage and asked him why he was so interested in make-up artistry.What followed was a dead silence.After what seemed a century,he slowly opened his mouth and here came the most inspiring beautiful reply.,Paragraph 1:He said his beloved wife partially lost her eyesight because of diabetes(糖尿病)and she was no longer able to apply her make-up.Paragraph 2:So he decided to take the course to surprise his wife.,读懂大意，理清脉络,主要是根据记叙文的六要素弄清文章大意，特别要弄清故事的人物，时态(通常是一般过去时)，事件(故事的起因和经过)，语言特色(以便在续写时语言特色前后一致，保持不变)，等等。,人物时态和事件 语言特色不要变,1,事件梳理,戴夫是当地社区大学的化妆师。他的学生大多是中年家庭主妇。但是一位绅士成了他的新学生，而且学习非常努力。其他女人都对这位绅士很好奇。最后，其中一个女士问他对化妆艺术如此感兴趣的理由。他说出了最动人的回答。,语言特色,.who wanted to.so as to make themselves more attractive.But this time,it was beyond him that.He was keen to learn as much as he possibly.He was so.that he wouldnt stop until.Understandably,.Throughout the lessons,ignoring the curious women around him,.,细读首句，构思框架,由续写的第一段首句与第二段首句确定第一段的框架。,2,两段首句定一框,二框二首正能量,第二段的框架，由第二段首句与正能量结尾来确定。,He said his beloved wife partially lost her eyesight because of diabetes and she was no longer able to apply her make-up.（他说他心爱的妻子由于糖尿病而部分失明。）So he decided to take the course to surprise her.（所以他决定参加这个课程来给她一个惊喜。）,Paragraph 1：1.由正文末端结尾可知，这位绅士作了最动人的回答。接着由续写的第一段首句可知，他心爱的妻子因为糖尿病部分失明，不能化妆。2.由第二段首句可知，他决定参加这个课程来给她一个惊喜，说明上一段绅士看到了妻子落寞悲伤的样子，知道了这个课程后，想要让她重新振作起来。说明本段写绅士看到了妻子因为失明无法化妆而郁郁寡欢，黯然神伤的样子。绅士想要帮助妻子走出困境。注意结尾要与下段语义衔接。,构思框架,两段首句定一框,由第一段框架可知，第一段中绅士看到妻子闷闷不乐，知道了化妆课程后希望有所帮助。那么本段应是绅士对其他女士们的详细回答以及妻子的现状与心情。Paragraph 2：1.由续写第二段首句可知，绅士决定参加这个课程来给妻子一个惊喜。2.由正能量结尾可知，妻子最终被丈夫感动，而绅士也表达出对妻子深深的爱。,构思框架,二框二首正能量,增加细节，开始写作,在已定框架范围内，依据情节发展和生活常识，推断故事中人物所见、所闻、所思、所说、所做等给每段增加5至8个具体细节，我们称之为“58细节添加法”。,3,Paragraph 1He said his beloved wife partially lost her eyesight because of diabetes and she was no longer able to apply her make-up.（他说他心爱的妻子由于糖尿病而部分失明。）,构思,从所给材料结尾和本段首句可知，绅士向女士们诉说了患有糖尿病而部分失明，不能化妆的情况。由下段首句So he decided to take the course to surprise her.可知绅士知道了这门化妆课程后决定帮助妻子重现笑容。所以本段应是写妻子患病后不能化妆来展示美貌而愁眉不展，自我封闭的状态。绅士决定要帮助她走出来。因此，本段可以这样构思：,Paragraph 1He said his beloved wife partially lost her eyesight because of diabetes and she was no longer able to apply her make-up.（他说他心爱的妻子由于糖尿病而部分失明。）,构思,得糖尿病，部分失明害怕嘲笑，自我封闭无法化妆，心烦意乱愁云惨淡，悲从中来丈夫心疼，得知课程决心学艺，有所作为,Paragraph 2So he decided to take the course to surprise her.（所以他决定参加这个课程来给她一个惊喜。）,构思,从本段首句可知，绅士决定参加化妆课程给妻子惊喜。那么，本段应是写绅士学会了化妆技巧以及妻子对此的反应；因为是对女士们作出最动人的回答，要写出绅士对妻子的爱的话语。因此，可以这样构思：,参加课程，给予惊喜不假思索，分享故事掌握技巧，重现美貌被爱包围，深受感动最美妆容，内在闪耀打动人心，最为微笑,修改润色，整洁誊写,审读初稿，注意语义是否衔接，前后是否连贯，事件是否符合逻辑，语言特色是否与前文一致。在修改润色之后，整齐工整地誊写在答卷上。,4,参考范文,Paragraph 1,He said his beloved wife partially lost her eyesight because of diabetes and she was no longer able to apply her make-up.Fearing being laughed at,she locked herself in her room,abandoning herself to great grief.She was absolutely beautiful even without make-up.But what upset her was that she simply felt not comfortable leaving the home without make-up.Sensing her loneliness in a colorless world,I was also at a loss as to what to do.Once informed of this class,I determined to learn make-up without hesitation,hoping to make a difference.,参考范文,Paragraph 2,So he decided to take the course to surprise her.Without a pause,he shared his story.He mastered a wide range of practical skills,allowing him to help her take on a new look.Surely,being enveloped by an atmosphere of love,his beloved wife at present was deeply affected.“I not only want to learn how to apply her make-up,I want her to wear the most beautiful make-up so her inner beauty also shines on the outside.”he announced,“It is her smile that touches most my heart,not the make-up.”,范文评析,1.语义衔接：He said.与上文语义衔接，表示动人故事将循循道来；I determined to.hoping to make a difference.首段最后一句体现绅士希望学习化妆课程让妻子开心，与上下文衔接得当。第一段写绅士的妻子因为失明无法化妆而郁郁寡欢，绅士想要帮助妻子走出困境；第二段写绅士对其他女士们的详细回答以及妻子重拾笑容的现状，前后一致。2.语言风格：Fearing being laughed at和Sensing her loneliness 与材料中的ignoring the curious women around him风格一致。3.上下连贯：But,Once 和so等表达，也与所给材料中的But this time,finally和after等风格一致。,范文评析,绅士的妻子因得糖尿病而部分失明，不能再化妆。因为害怕被人嘲笑，也不喜欢素颜出门，即使丈夫认为自己不化妆也漂亮，还是每天在家自我封闭，黯然神伤。后来绅士知道化妆课程后，为了妻子努力学习，最后让她被爱包围，重现笑容，体现故事的曲折性原则。总之，范文符合续写三原则。,THANK YOU,